My new poem, please answer if you like it or not and suggestions would be great thanks.?

She comes walking down the stairs


With hundreds of people staring at her


They are watching what she wears


Just to she if she is wearing her furs





She opens her eyes


His hand is out in front of her


So she puts hers out too


This very handsome prince


Asks her for a dance or two.





They dance around the room


And she doesn’t mind the people around them


She realizes that the groom


Is staring at all of them.





As she, the bride,


Stares at his face


She realizes that he is showing nothing to hide


As he looks around this wonderful place.





His smile so wide


As if to say


Ladies and Gentlemen this is my bride


And I love her everyday


More and more.





She wakes and realizes this can’t be true


Because at night I pray for you


That you rest in peace


And that you love me too.





She had fallen asleep at the mattress store


And everyone heard and was staring at her


They said sorry for watching while you’re taking a snore


But as you woke up it all just seemed such a blur.





She told them the story


Of her husband and her


She said he always held her as if with great glory


They all started to cry as they listened to her





They said it’s like a fairytale


With no happy ending


She said they were following such a happy trail


And had not realized such horrible things were pending


A little girl asks


Excuse Miss I was wondering how did your husband die


The little girl was oddly wearing a mask


The woman starts to cry and says darling I’ll try





I had just found out I was pregnant on our yearly anniversary


So I called him at work


And told him not to hurry


So happy was he and asked the clerk





So they let come home and there was no traffic


He speeded his way home and didn’t make it


From there it gets too graphic


Because he got hit





Instead of him running to my door


It was the police


And I hit to the floor


But I know he will rest in peace





From there I had the baby


but every time I saw her


She reminded me so much of him


So I could not deal with her





I put her for adoption


And they came right away


They gave me the option


Would you like to see her and I said NO WAY





Now that I realize what I had I miss my darling husband


And his beautiful baby girl


I need to get out of this dreamland


And out of this whirl





My life had been a mess


And my daughter is probably around eight going to be nine


I would put her in dressed


And say she’s all mine.





I would love her


Like I love her daddy


And in my arms I would curl her in a hug


And say I love you Maddie





I would give anything to go back to those days


The days when I had her in my arms


Those days are such a haze


And I’d give her all of these charms





The little girl interrupts


With tears in her eyes


She take off her mask and says sorry to disrupt


But this story that you are saying reminds me of mines





You see my name is Maddie


And I’m just about nine


I haven’t met my daddy


You see every month I have a new assign





I am also a foster child


And they tell me my mommy didn’t want me


But I kill them with a smile


And I run to the tree





They talked and talked for hours


And the woman couldn’t believe it


The woman left to go but Maddie some flowers


Maddie started to cry and couldn’t believe it





They checked all their paperwork at the foster home


And yes indeed she was Maddie’s mom


She took her out of there and took her home


The woman looked at her darling


and said oh dear you’re growing so fast


soon you will be going to prom.





Fifteen years later Maddie was twenty-four


She got married and named her first baby boy after her mom’s handsome prince


Life went on for everyone and they all lived


HAPPILY EVER AFTER





THE END.

My new poem, please answer if you like it or not and suggestions would be great thanks.?
could i suggest that it is a tad long
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