What do u think of this , i wrote it myself? star it if u like, and if u didnt like it can u plz tell me why?

i wrote it for my best friend


this is it:-


if my body disappeared ..


and my name went..


this is my hand writing stay ..


to make u remember ..


forever all the way..


to the person where my heart..


will always stay..


i really wanna say..


that the thing what i know..


that i love u..


i also wanna tell u..


that i lived with u..


the happiest and the sweetest days of my life..


and i always hope a good life for u,,


and plz if u could come back..


plz do that..


cuz i love u..


i need u..


and i cant live without u..


i want u to know that..


ur love is the best thing in my life..


i saw u in my dreams..


i draw u in my imagination..


and i kept u in my heart..


i loved u from all my heart..


and by all the sense of the word..


sweety, i'm writing for u..


cuz of ur white heart..


ur brown eyes and ur black hair..


baby, ur more beautiful than any flower..


u r the most valuable thing in the word..


finally, i wanna say..


ur in my soul and the waves of my blood..


that's it

What do u think of this , i wrote it myself? star it if u like, and if u didnt like it can u plz tell me why?
Its honest and real. but, you take expression out of the arabic language and write them down in English:"my name want" and "white heart" words like these don't really do it in english.





after you wrote white heart, you got carried away and went on: "ur brown eyes and black hair" like you are describing a mugger to the police.





"waves of my heart" doesn't really have a meaning here. Had you mentioned the ocean or sea and then said that, maybe??





Actually I enjoyed it bec it is spontaneous. thank you.
Reply:its nice dat u wrote a poem for ur friend...but poems r nottttt dat much long dear dat people get bored...its really great dat u write it n express wat u feel n best of luck ...keep practicin
Reply:its sweet, but dont call it a poem
Reply:nice,because u love ur friend%26amp;write good words.
Reply:it is nice
Reply:It's very sweet of you to write a poem for your friend, my dear. However, you need to work on your language and grammar a bit more. Best of luck.
Reply:it is tender.


your heart is throbbing with true love .


your love must be happy to read this.
Reply:Di tarkeebet dawa?.. sorry just kidding.. it's nice full of nice feelings, but the grammarrrrrr my dear



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