Is this poem any good?

Sometimes I think the sun hates flowers


and the stars startle the moon


like a baby-faced apocalypse


And, when in your world


there is light


it doesn't come from candles


but from a dripping stairwell


leading...


...upstairs to the ground

Is this poem any good?
everything was okay til i got to the dripping stairwell leading upstairs to the ground You lost me their
Reply:No, you are trying to be too cute. KISS. Keep it simple. Rework your ideas but try not to be too heady. The best poems allow the user to read in their own thoughts and ideas.
Reply:i luv it.
Reply:its a cool idea. i see where your going with it, but it doesnt flow. i like the pharases "baby-faced apocalypse" and "leading upstairs to the ground". try to keep the idae but change up the wording so its more rythmic (like "leading upstairs to the ground"). keep writing!! poetry is so magical
Reply:i think it's a very good start, but it is very lost and disoriented keep trying !
Reply:no
Reply:Not really. A poem is supposed to express your very own opinion and thoughts. In this poem, it sounds lost. Sorry, but that is my honest opinion.
Reply:The sun does not hate flowers!! =] I see detail but its coming out of a thesaurus. Use emotion and don't be embarrassed to show it.



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